My topic for essay 1 in ARW is the basis of discrimination of burakumin. The reason I chose this topic is that I became interested in this problem since I had had a lecture by a woman whose ancestor used to be a burakumin in high school. I never had an opportunity to study much about this topic since then, but I'd like to study about the basis of discrimination of burakumin by doing research and writing an essay.
My thesis statement is: The basis of discrimination of burakumin and the affect it gives to burakumin's marriage.
9/19
I'll change my thesis statement.
My thesis statement would be; The issues of discrimination of burakumin should be taught in junior high schools in Japan.
I beleive that junior high school is the appropriate time for teaching discrimination of burakumin for many reasons. First, all Japanese child goes to junior high school. Second, Japanese history is taught in junior high school and it gives better understanding for the students. Third, since Japanese girls can marry from the age of 16, they should know about marriage discrimination before they turn 16.
Your thesis statement looks very usable. The supporting reasons are also appropriate and clearly expressed. You'll need to repeat the supporting points for Blogging Assignment 2, which will make that an easy HW assignment for you.
ReplyDeletePut the thesis and supporting points into your Essay 1 outline document (Yoshimatsu E1 OL WC).